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Bon, j'ai un band et j'ai composer une chanson *jai volée une ou deux phrases a p!atd mais bon...lol* et je veut savoir se que vs en pensez :

PROVISIONAL

She was looking me with fourty eyes,
And you can’t feel it, you can’t feel it.
Caught in her cage, she was looking us fading away
Imagining a plan to be free
And you can’t feel it, you can’t feel it.

Her liberty was provisional, she was immediately
caught up.
But she had nowhere to go.
She was saying :
« You laught at me ‘cause i’m different,
But I laught at you ‘cause your all the same! »

She was looking me with fourty eyes,
Caught in her cage, she was looking us passing
Imagining a plan to escape
And you can’t feel it, you can’t feel it.

all the crushed hearts were looking, she’s walking
Advancing while crawling in the alley,
Couldn’t stop to sream
That she was caught in hell for eternity

Her liberty was provisional, she was immediately
caught up.
But she had nowhere to go.
She was saying :
« You laught at me ‘cause i’m different,
But I laught at you ‘cause your all the same! »

She was looking me with fourty eyes,
Caught in her cage, she was looking us crying
Imagining a plan to go away
And you can’t feel it, you can’t feel it.

Imagining,
A better kiss, a better touch, a better fuck.
And you can’t feel it, you can’t feel it.

She was looking me with fourty eyes,
Caught in her cage, she was looking us singning
Imagining a plan to Die
And you can’t feel it, you can’t feel it.
A better kiss, a better touch, a better fuck!

Si vs aimez pas, dites le aussi, il faut aussi que j'aprenne a accepter les critiques bonne sou mauvaises donc... merci d'avance!

j'aime bien !! c'est sur que juste des paroles comme sa... sa inspire pas beaucoup mais c'est beau je trouve

Je comprend pas l'anglais désolé Sans blagué je comprend que dalle (enfin pas tout lol), j'aurais voulu te donné mon avie car moi aussi j'écrit mais la je peut pas. Jsuis vraiment nul en anglais encore désolé

Mais naaan t'excuse pas c,est pas de ta faute si tu manques de talent....^^ non je rigole bien sûr!!!!!
moi non plus j'ai pas tout compris là mais en gros sa semble bon

Non mais vas y moque toi de moi toi, non mais méchante va lol Pas de ma faute si j'suis pas doué

On peu pas être doué dans tout les domaines ^^

Mouais...d'accord j'avoue que des fois je suis méchante je crois...dsl ^^

Ahh mais non tu n'es pas méchanteuhh c'est mon niveau qui est affligeant mdr